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London School of Economics and Political Science(伦敦政治经济学院)
所在地区:英格兰所在城市:LondonTIMES排名:8
获取留学方案文章正文综述详细专业照片新闻校友录已获Offer学生资料要怎样才能得到审稿人的青睐呢? 经过多年的审核申请文书经验,我们发现同学们最常犯错的地方或遗失的重点如下。就如同找工作时的简历表一样,出国留学申请文书中的个人陈述是申请学校时的重要环节,为何如此重要呢?
因为这是一份审稿人员对你的第一印象,审稿人员看不到你,不能跟你坐下来好好谈谈,只能靠着冰冰冷冷的档案,字数通常有限。
要怎样才能得到审稿人的青睐呢?
经过多年的审核申请文书经验,我们发现同学们最常犯错的地方或遗失的重点如下:
1、请依照学校要求字数撰写
每所学校都会有不同字数要求,有些要求在1000字内(例如伦敦政治经济学院LSE) 或是600字内(KCL),这些要求如果没有做到,很容易就会被学校刷下了!
2、请依照学校要求内容撰写
大部份学校要求都是需要写申请此专业的动机,为何决定申请此学位,专业与你学业背景还有工作有和相关,未来的就业计划。
另外,值得注意的是,英国留学文书申请比较偏向学生将学业背景还有经验与专业做个连接。
也就是说,一定要围绕在此专业相关的资讯,如果添加不相干的容易被刷下来。
实际例子:
LSE网页上面清清楚楚就写了他门不会录用的PS内容(poor personal statement):
“I was the captain of the school football team and excelled in most other sports. I have also worked part-time in a sports store to earn money for university.”
此句子并没有展现没有你对此专业以及对学习上进入大学后有任何帮助。
因此,应该要这样修改,由此例句来对照。
“I was the captain of the school football team, and this has taught me the importance of working together as a team, and allowed me to prioritise my time between my studies and football practice. I feel that this has provided me with the experience to successfully balance my academic and social life, and I plan to continue this balance whilst at university."
这就有展现出此当足球长的经验对你在大学学习有何帮助,你学到的东西是何物?
以下例句皆为必须避免的(转自LSE官网)
"I have always dreamed of coming to LSE since I was young. It has been a dream of mine to study at this institution, which is well renowned for its social science courses.”
(无实际内容以及个人启发,不受青睐。)
“I am currently studying History, English and Business and Management at Higher level and Italian, Maths and Chemistry at Standard level in the International Baccalaureate, and feel that these subjects are providing me with a solid background for university study.”
(这些你学过的科目不用在重复,因为审稿人员也可以看你的transcript 得知你所学习过的科系以及分数,这些内容只是浪费空间)
“I want to study History because I want to be a world class Historian, and feel that this degree will help me. I am especially interested in Ancient History, particularly the history concerning the Roman Empire. I am fascinated by the way in which the empire was run, and the events that led to its downfall.”
(这个是重点了! 因为LSE 没有Ancient history 的课程,这样写就代表你连看课程设置都没有,当然不会上)
“It is my dream to become an alumni of the School, and I am sure that as I am the top student of my class, you will offer me a place."
(太过傲慢,需要积极正面说说自己的好且谦虚,千万不要自以为是)